An article by the Writing Center for California State
University San Marcos (CSUSM) titled Voice and Point of View advises:
“Passive voice occurs when the verb’s agent (the
doer) is not the subject of the sentence. Active voice occurs when the
subject of a sentence performs the verb’s action. Active voice is favored in
most academic disciplines and everyday speech due to it is considered more
assertive and less wordy. However, passive voice is favored in scientific
disciplines since the observer may not be aware of what causes a phenomenon.”
A second article by The Writing Center for the University of
Wisconsin – Madison titled Use the active voice discusses when to use passive
voice:
“Generally, try to use the active voice whenever possible.
Passive voice sentences often use more words, can be vague, and can lead to a
tangle of prepositional phrases.”
When to use passive voice:
To emphasize the action rather than the actor
To keep the subject and focus consistent throughout a
passage
To be tactful by not naming the actor
To describe a condition where the actor is unknown or
unimportant
To create an authoritative tone”
A third article by John Cadley on page 28 in the April 2022 Toastmaster
magazine titled Weasel Words gives a specific example:
“And let’s not forget the passive voice, a plethora of
opportunities for the weaselly minded. For instance, ‘The design was presented
to the client.’ Who was the presenter? Nobody, which is exactly what you want
if the client hates the work. Compare this to ‘I presented the design to the
client.’ That’s the active voice. Never use the active voice. It marks
you with a big red X that says, ‘Looking for someone to blame? That’s me!’ Yes,
you could take one for the team, but it’s not the weasel way.”
A fourth article at the National Archives on July 2, 2019
titled Plain Writing Tips – Passive Voice and Zombies explains how to detect
passive voice:
“So, here’s a handy tip to test your writing (by way of
Ellen Fried on the ICN) and make you laugh. If you are afraid your sentence is
in the passive voice, add the phrase ‘by zombies.’ If it still makes
grammatical sense, it’s in the passive voice.
Passive: The form was processed and returned (by zombies).
Active: We completed your request and mailed the form to you…”
On April 14, 2024 I blogged about how Undelivered is a book
by Jess Nussbaum on the never-heard speeches that would have rewritten history.
A brief one was written by General Dwight Eisenhower, to deliver if the D-Day
landings had failed:
“Our landings in the Cherbourg-Havre area have failed to
gain a satisfactory foothold and I have withdrawn the troops. My decision to
attack at this time and place was based on the best information available. The
troops, the air and the Navy did all that bravery and devotion to duty could
do. If any blame or fault attaches to the attempt it is mine alone.”
He originally used passive voice, and had said:
“The troops have been
withdrawn.”
That change was discussed in a fifth article, a speech by Jeffrey
Nussbaum titled What Reading Teaches that appeared on pages 38 and 39 in These
Vital Speeches - The Best of the 2024 Cicero Speechwriting Awards.
A sixth article from the Agency for Toxic Substances and
Disease Registry at the Centers for Disease Control and Prevention (CDC) titled
Your Guide to CLEAR WRITING has A Note About Active Voice on page 48:
“In the 19th and early 20th centuries, scientists wrote in
active voice. But around 1920, scientists started adopting passive
voice, possibly because it seemed more objective and impersonal.
Scientific journals have swung back to active voice,
especially because all majot publication manuals (AMA, APA, Chicago) recommend
it. After all, active voice is clear, concise, and direct.
In fact, it’s difficult to find any journals that actually
advocate for the use of passive voice. And prestigious journals such as
the British Medical Journal specifically instruct authors to use active
voice.
Use active voice as much as possible in your article. Use passive
only when the actor is unknown or is of less importance. For example, you may
use some passive voice in parts of the method section of your article.”
A seventh extremely detailed article by Jacob M. Carpenter from
2022 in Legal Communication & Rhetoric magazine (Volume 19 pages 95 to 127)
titled The Problems and Positives, of Passives: Exploring why Controlling
Passive Voice and Nominalizations Is About More Than Preference and Style can
be downloaded as a 34-page pdf.
The image with active and passive was modified from this one
at Openclipart. A zombie silhouette also came from there. The weasel was
adapted from an image at Wikimedia Commons.
